Fanfic beta (?) needed: SGA canon-departure AU

[michelel72]

It's done it's done it's doooooooooone. 26,500 words over three months, most of them difficult.

Anyway. I'm looking for early-reader feedback on an SGA story. It's about 26.5k words; it's ultimately Rodney-centric (obviously — I mean, we've met, right?) and departs from canon somewhere between 3x14 and 3x17. (Or you could say it departs from canon thousands of years ago, but our characters still go through canon until this point.) I'm not looking for someone to do just spelling/punctuation/grammar review (SPaG). I had trouble with this story, and I suspect it's missing something, so I'm looking for one or two folks who can tell me if the story works at all; and if it works, what (if anything) is missing or needs better development.

Warnings: References to genocide; brief descriptions of OC tortures and deaths (including children); body horror; captivity and minor torture; ableist language and slurs in POV; mental programming without permission
Summary: The expedition finds surprising signs of a long-missing race, but a greater surprise lies in store. I feel like the warnings as listed are more alarming than the fic itself is, but I so can't judge at this point.

Anyway. Anyone interested?

Comments

[sophia-sol.livejournal.com]

Welp, I'd be happy to do a beta for you but I don't guarantee I'd actually be any use, since the big-picture stuff is the stuff I'm less good at. But if you have no other offers I'd gladly take a look and see if there's anything I can be helpful with!

[michelel72.livejournal.com]

::glomps you:: Honestly, I'd love to hear your take, regardless. This is an odd one, and it feels very rough-draft-y because it was hard for me to find a rhythm. Let me toss some specific questions on the bottom of the document and then send it to you. Thank you!

[sophia-sol.livejournal.com]

*glomps back* Yay! I will look forward to getting the email, and will do my best to find useful things to say!

[valleya.livejournal.com]

I've got some time if you still want another set of eyes. Just send it on and I'll send it back as soon as I can.

[michelel72.livejournal.com]

Oh, that would be lovely — I use John's POV to tell much of the story, and I'd like to know if it works for you as a John fan. Sending. Thank you!

[valleya.livejournal.com]

Got it! I'll send it back to you as soon as I can. I'm looking forward to it

[schneefink.livejournal.com]

Looks like you already found people :) Congrats on finishing the first draft! Have some cake! Finishing is sometimes the hardest part.