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michelel72) wrote2019-11-24 07:54 pm
michelel72) wrote2019-11-24 07:54 pm
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Sunday snippet 11/24 (Sound of Silver #8: The editing edition)
So I completed a first draft midweek, and I've been tweaking since then. Looks like I'm currently at something approximating 92,800 words -- it's hard to tell when I'm split across four Google Docs and have two competing chapter-break models in place.
There's a part of me that is impatient to start posting, but I've made huge improvements to some passages already, and my reader is pointing out several things that needed bolstering, too. (And, y'know, needs time to have a life around reading this behemoth for me.) And I'm still not quite happy with the flow of The Biggest Scene. (It's much, much better now that I've spaced it out, and I think it helps that I purposely started dropping certain punctuation for that section. I'm trying to decide if I want to mess with justification, too, for the stickiest bit; it would be gimmicky as all get-out, but it might actually work. I don't know.)
"Wait, they made you watch Pixar? We were '70s-and-'80s kids! We grew up on those cheap Saturday morning cartoons. There's no way you were prepared to handle that much animated angst. You sure you don't want to take some time off to recover?" There's the faint trace of an honest question in that, using silliness as a cover to make sure he really is okay more generally.
"It's fine. I was seventeen, not seven. I'm only a little permanently emotionally scarred by the lonely wanderings of the only surviving creatures in a post-apocalyptic trashscape." There's a little more honesty than he really intended in his answer. Maybe it really is just that he didn't have the right background, but man, those scenes got under his skin. "They don't give us enough Disney-trauma leave for me to blow it on this."
There's a part of me that is impatient to start posting, but I've made huge improvements to some passages already, and my reader is pointing out several things that needed bolstering, too. (And, y'know, needs time to have a life around reading this behemoth for me.) And I'm still not quite happy with the flow of The Biggest Scene. (It's much, much better now that I've spaced it out, and I think it helps that I purposely started dropping certain punctuation for that section. I'm trying to decide if I want to mess with justification, too, for the stickiest bit; it would be gimmicky as all get-out, but it might actually work. I don't know.)
"Wait, they made you watch Pixar? We were '70s-and-'80s kids! We grew up on those cheap Saturday morning cartoons. There's no way you were prepared to handle that much animated angst. You sure you don't want to take some time off to recover?" There's the faint trace of an honest question in that, using silliness as a cover to make sure he really is okay more generally.
"It's fine. I was seventeen, not seven. I'm only a little permanently emotionally scarred by the lonely wanderings of the only surviving creatures in a post-apocalyptic trashscape." There's a little more honesty than he really intended in his answer. Maybe it really is just that he didn't have the right background, but man, those scenes got under his skin. "They don't give us enough Disney-trauma leave for me to blow it on this."